Post by Feral Ninja on Apr 7, 2008 23:46:15 GMT 4
Ok, here I'll post chapters of a book i am making (Yes... i like writing books...OK!? -.-; I wrote a few other books in the past, most of them having a Final Fantasy theme to it (Bad guy takes over the world, you must stop him with slowly getting more friends and in the end defeat the bastard.) and seeing as this story is in the making as a book, i need constructive criticism. ^^
Oh, and this story will NOT include Ninjas, maybe a small role but this story is not about Ninjas.
Chapter 0 ~ The Beginning
''A world covered in darkness...''
''A world with no hope...''
The child, Feral. (7 Years old.) Sat on the couch thinking of what he would do that day, but more importantly, he was thinking of what presents he would get seeing it was his birthday...
Suddenly, he heard knocks on the door... *Knock!* *Knock!*
Feral rushed to the door and opened it, it was his grandfather...
''Happy Birthday, Feral!'' he said as he hugged his dear grandchild.
''Here's your present, Feral... I hope you enjoy it!'' Feral opened the package and inside was a old book, the cover said ''The Prophecy Within''
Feral wasn't in to reading books, but he thanked his grandfather and began to read...
''The world will perish..Bla...Bla...Bla....one hero to save the world...Bla...Bla...Bla...The one that holds the key to the door...Bla...Bla...Bla...''
The reading soon ended with a bang, the village was under attack by strange creatures, Cricklers they were called... Feral had heared from those creatures before, but they never attacked their village... ''Go upstairs!'' His grandfather, Father and mother yelled. Feral Rushed to the attic with tears on his cheeks and closed the door.....
Screams were being heard, the clashing of swords and suddenly it went all quiet.....
Suddenly, Feral heard footsteps on the stairs... *Bonk* *Bonk*
Feral grabbed a metal pipe and hid behind the door...
The door opened slowly and a shadow of someone was seen...
Feral kicked the door and the door hitted the person behind it...
The person was his friend, John. (8 Years)
''John!!!'' Feral screamed...
''Why the hell did you do that for!?'' he suddenly heard... ''John, are you okay? Dude, i'm sorry i thought you were one of them!''
Together they ran away from their town, and sought refuge in the safety of the woods...
Chapter 1 ~ Rangers, Thieves and one really ugly monster.
In Progress.
Note: I'll use this post to post all the chapters.
Oh, and this story will NOT include Ninjas, maybe a small role but this story is not about Ninjas.
Chapter 0 ~ The Beginning
''A world covered in darkness...''
''A world with no hope...''
The child, Feral. (7 Years old.) Sat on the couch thinking of what he would do that day, but more importantly, he was thinking of what presents he would get seeing it was his birthday...
Suddenly, he heard knocks on the door... *Knock!* *Knock!*
Feral rushed to the door and opened it, it was his grandfather...
''Happy Birthday, Feral!'' he said as he hugged his dear grandchild.
''Here's your present, Feral... I hope you enjoy it!'' Feral opened the package and inside was a old book, the cover said ''The Prophecy Within''
Feral wasn't in to reading books, but he thanked his grandfather and began to read...
''The world will perish..Bla...Bla...Bla....one hero to save the world...Bla...Bla...Bla...The one that holds the key to the door...Bla...Bla...Bla...''
The reading soon ended with a bang, the village was under attack by strange creatures, Cricklers they were called... Feral had heared from those creatures before, but they never attacked their village... ''Go upstairs!'' His grandfather, Father and mother yelled. Feral Rushed to the attic with tears on his cheeks and closed the door.....
Screams were being heard, the clashing of swords and suddenly it went all quiet.....
Suddenly, Feral heard footsteps on the stairs... *Bonk* *Bonk*
Feral grabbed a metal pipe and hid behind the door...
The door opened slowly and a shadow of someone was seen...
Feral kicked the door and the door hitted the person behind it...
The person was his friend, John. (8 Years)
''John!!!'' Feral screamed...
''Why the hell did you do that for!?'' he suddenly heard... ''John, are you okay? Dude, i'm sorry i thought you were one of them!''
Together they ran away from their town, and sought refuge in the safety of the woods...
Chapter 1 ~ Rangers, Thieves and one really ugly monster.
In Progress.
Note: I'll use this post to post all the chapters.